A Rising

a silhouette of a young person, with moon eclipsing the sun
pixabay image by Natan Vance

I have been lying low
I have been waiting,
Waiting for this moment
The right moment to leap out

It is now, I tell myself
‘Togetherness’ was the day –
“When they meet in wee hours,
Both the sources of light.”

Eerie silence encompassed me
As I struggled out,
I tried to run toward light
A pull seized me

Shackles entrenched my feet,
Shadows seemed to smother
My spirits, but they soared
Higher than the skyscrapers

All cries froze on my lips.
In the grip of an unseen power,
As if my bones were melting
Rays were piercing like needles

Igniting my power
Of swallowing the darkness,
I spread my arms
To gather the diminishing light

The threshold of new life smiled
I rise today
To shake off the darkness
That has eclipsed mankind.
© Balroop Singh. March, 2019

Inspired from D. Wallace Peach’s “Monthly Speculative Fiction Writing Prompt.” Please hop over to her blog to read more and get inspired.

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59 thoughts on “A Rising

  1. Great Balroop. Dark and frightening but with light in the end.

    Shackles entrenched my feet,
    Shadows seemed to smother
    My spirits, but they soared
    Higher than the skyscrapers ”

    Had to quote this. 😉

    miriam

  2. Wonderful, Balroop. I love the build-up of potential and then the power in the end as the darkness is shaken off. Your poems are beautiful. Thanks so much for playing along! 🙂 I’ll get this set up for a reblog. ❤

    1. Thank you Diana, this was going into paranormal but I had to veer it around! I have been trying to add some more power into this young man but words seemed to fail me. Then I thought, let it go! 🙂

  3. Really liked this poem, Balroop. I liked how you weaved imagery and emotional thoughts so seamlessly together. I like how in the second stanza the protagonist imagines light and believes in it in order to manifest it. Sometimes the road to the light is a long and challenging one, and ‘as if my bones were melting’ reminds me of how sometimes the challenges can make us feel like giving up. The ‘swallowing the darkness’ and ‘gather the diminishing light’ reminds me of how bold we can be taking on our fears and at the same time working towards what we want. Wonderful write 🙂

    1. Many thanks for such a beautiful analysis of my poem Mabel… symbolism defines poetry and you have chosen the right ones to discern their meaning. I appreciate how you delve deeper into the words to understand the emotions. Much love dear friend.

  4. As always, your poems convey positivity. Those last lines are uplifting.
    I think we humans at some point of life feel chained. Chained to thoughts. Chained to situations. Chained to circumstances………
    Sometimes, it is hard to imagine that solutions exist. There is hope. Your poems convey hope! Well written!

    1. You understand poetry so well arv! I agree those chains are self-created, actually our culture and traditions hover around us to bind us to situations and it is quite challenging to break free, also decide how much of freedom!
      Thank you for reading and sharing your insights, much appreciated.

      1. I agree. The concept of religion and society itself is guided by creating restrictions and boundaries. This doesn’t go down well with a large number of people, especially in current times.

  5. Balroop, a compelling and relentless poem that had me wanting to rush to the end, yet I forced myself to read slowly, absorb the double meaning of the words, letting the true depths of the poem reveal itself. This is brilliantly written and a study of mankind as a whole, our role as an individual. May we all be able to ‘Shake off the darkness’!

    1. Symbolism and alliteration are my favorite devices and I try to use them as much as possible in my poems Annika. Many thanks for noticing the layers, which go beyond the words. Stay blessed dear friend.

  6. I love this poem! Great job with the subtle build up! Each line feels like a mantra – and yet they all flow so well. I enjoyed the first person, which adds mystery as we slowly uncover state of the world.

    1. What a benevolent thought to share! I am glad you liked the build up and the flow of this poem Ethan. All credit goes to the mystical image. Thank you for the visit.

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