This week, the challenge is “to share the view outside your window by writing a syllabic poem.” Here is the view from my window though the picture doesn’t show the howling wind and the continuous rain… spring still seems far away!
wrathful wind howls,
inert spring stumbles
nonplussed, she looks at the
silvery sky that shields sun.
My picture window remains closed
to keep the wayward winter chill and
the unpleasant sounds of the wild wind out.
So ferocious that it knocks down blossoms
as if spring charm is at its mercy!
It’s fun to watch freaky weather
only from my French window
and wait for fragrant queen
to arrive with breeze
loved by lillies
© Balroop Singh
Thanks to Colleen for the inspiration to write syllabic poetry. My admiration for this form has grown with each attempt.
I have written a double Etheree which consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. Etheree can also be reversed and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1.
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48 thoughts on “My Picture Window #Etheree”
I am now looking forward to Spring even more! ❤
So true! Rain in this month sounds weird! Thanks for sharing your thoughts Annette.
Love the form and just perfect for your subject 🌲
Thank you A.J. I am happy to hear that.
This was a perfect poem to enjoy while listening to the continuous Drip drip drip of the rain and the winds were holing just a little while ago. Spring is only in the mind with this weather :)) I love the form of this poem.
I am glad you like this form Prag. it gives a little liberty to say more otherwise syllabic poetry is quite restrictive. Thank you for sharing your thoughts, the drip drip is still on as I watch the sky from my couch. 😀
Yes the drip drip is On :)))
Really strong imagery. I felt like I was seeing out your window!
Thank you! I am glad you liked it.
Very nice view Balroop. We can feel that winter is not ready yet to leave and your wish for spring to blossom. A poem I enjoyed a lot!!
Thank you Marie. Spring blossoms have been knocked down by the storm! Daffodils have lost their brilliance. Spring has been clouded!
Thank you Staci.
Wonderful poem, Balroop. Watching weather from your window–sometimes the only safe way! It brought to mind the old movie, Rear Window.
Nothing is cozier than my couch when it rains. Thank you for sharing your thoughts Jacqui.
That looks similar to the view from my window too, Balroop. A gorgeous, blustery poem, and I love the hopeful vision of the spring queen’s arrival at the end. I can’t wait.
Thank you Diana, hope is a wonderful word, it always warms the heart. 🤗
What a wonderful view from your window, Balroop and such a lovely poem. Awesome.
Thank you Kamal. Yes, I love waking up to this view each morning. 😊
So beautiful and lovely it is Balroop. Always welcome dear.
Beautifully written, Balroop! You’ve added more layers to what we can see in the picture.
Thank you Lisa for sharing your lovely thoughts. 🤗
Fabulous, Balroop. I like how you shared a photo too! It’s been a wild spring, that’s for sure. But, it looks like you have a glorious view! 💛
Oh yes Colleen, this million dollar view from my bedroom and living room has inspired a number of poems. I can see the sunrise and the full moon from my couch and an amazing view beyond the trees is Mount Diablo! Thank you1 🤗
You are in a great spot! My view is only of houses and a few trees. But upstairs I see the most glorious moon rises in the eastern sky! 💖
Balroop, such a good job on this poem–it’s so perfect. You chose such a great form for it, too.
Thank you Luanne, I am delighted to hear that.
You are welcome!
So evocative 💜
Thank you Willow 💛
A vividly descriptive poem, Balroop. What’s happening outside my windows is a lot more mellow as we move into autumn.
We have had a long winter Robbie, and are tired of this wet weather! looking forward to sunny days. Thanks for stopping by. 🤗
I read that Canada had the worst winter in 80 years. I imagine it would be the same in the USA. I hope spring comes quickly.
Yes, California weather has broken all records!
I could picture myself at your window watching all that (but am quite happy to be in my Florida sunshine…lol!). Great poem, Balroop!
Yvette M Calleiro 🙂
We have seen a long drought Yvette, and so we were happy with so much of rain in the beginning but now it has become too much!! Thank you for coming over to read and share your thoughts.
Wow, I love the photo and your poem. You’ve captured the movement and possibilities, Balroop, exquisitely.
Thank you so much Gwen, your thoughts are much appreciated. 😊
This is magical, Balroop. 🙂
Thank you Kitty 🤗
A vivid and beautiful poem, Balroop. So relatable, but it’s nice to get a break in the blustery weather. Spring might be around the corner. 🤗
Thank you Lauren. I am glad the day I was responding to this prompt, the weather was so unseemly! I could write a poem within minutes! 😀
Such a fun poem, Balroop! ❤ I like writing syllabic poems, and this is one I would like to try. What a beautiful green view outside your window. I felt the cool rain and the wind blowing through the pine trees as I read the poem! 🙂
Thank you so much Cheryl, I am delighted to hear that my words could reach your heart. 🥰
We moved to Portland three months ago, Balroop! It’s April, but we had hail today. The outside of my window isn’t any better than yours. I’m still in a California mood, so I planted roses, daffodils, and primrose. I’ll plant daylilies, pansies, and many more kinds of flowers. I love your poem and the anticipation of the coming of the fragrant queen.
Oregon is a beautiful state! it’s nice that you have moved nearer to your grandkids. I am sure your lilies and pansies would smile soon. 😊 Thanks for stopping by to share your thoughts Miriam.