
1860
painting by Ferdinand Georg Waldmüller (Museum: Bavarian State Painting Collections) wikidata.org
Jim has been waiting
the expected one arrives
tears sheath her vision,
as the holy urn she holds
contains ashes of her mom.
***
the rocky terrain,
a lonely lane of life glows
with expectations
when her lover walks with her
to assuage her grieving nerves.
***
the urn gets heavy
woeful, she sits at the edge
her tears trickle down,
merge in the flowing water
as she immerses ashes.
© Balroop Singh
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What a lovely poetic story, Balroop 🌷💗
Thank you Robbie, I am glad you like it. 🥰
So sad, but also so beautiful. Well done, Balroop.
Thank you Mae, sad stories need to be shared. Have a wonderful day.
Aw, such a poignant tale!
Thank you Annette, your feedback is much appreciated. 💛
Your interpretation is beautiful, Balroop. So much kindness in this one despite the loss. Just lovely.
Thank you Diana for discerning the kindness within the words. I saw a sad expression on the girl’s face and my thoughts careened toward tragedy.
I wondered what she was carrying and I could see why you went where you did. 🙂
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What a sad but beautiful poem, Balroop!
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts Yvette, much appreciated. 🤗
Very nice poetry – we can feel emotions through your words.
Stay well Balroop
Thank you Miriam, I am delighted to hear that the emotions reached you. Stay blessed dear friend.
Balroop, I love what you see in the painting! You are so creative. I never thought about a small urn or a box of ashes. The emotions expressed through your words are spot on! ⭐️⭐️⭐️ 🫶🏻 I love this so much!
Thank you so much Colleen, your words always warm my heart. It’s the sad expression on the face of the girl that kicked my muse. 😊
I missed that look. I saw the silly look on the lad’s face and used that. Bravo to you for seeing more than meets the eye!
To me, the artist’s focus seems to be the girl. Also the rocky path conveys another message. Weird how art remains relevant for ages! 😊
I like how you thoughtfully examine the details of the painting. And, a funeral urn or box is such a creative viewpoint. That’s why I like these Ekphrastic challenges. We all see different things.
I too love Ekphrastic challenges, as they inflame imagination. 😊🤗
I love that, Balroop. You are an artistic and visual person. 🩵
Thank you 🥰
Such a memory. Beautiful.
Thanks Jacqui.
I like how you saw this. There is a sad feeling you captured beautifully. Xo
Thank you Denise.🤗
It’s so interesting how different poets see the same image in unique ways. I love your take on the prompt. Sadness permeates the words. Well done, Balroop!
That’s what art is all about Jan, interpretations of viewers and readers makes it worthwhile. Thank you for reading and sharing your lovely thoughts.
Your poetry speaks of the picture so beautifully, a beautiful story painted with your words.
Thank you Prag for sharing your thoughts. Love and hugs.
A sad, but beautiful story told through your lovely poetic words, Balroop.
Thank you Lauren.
I was with the girl, and thanks to your poem, I felt her sadness, grief, and release. Yes, I was that girl (but more woman). ❤
I am delighted to hear that Pam. Thank you for sharing your emotions. 🤗
Balroop, I love the narrative you created in this poem. Very unique, too!
Thank you Luanne for reading and sharing your thoughts.
You are welcome!
This was lovely. I like how you weaved grief and love together.
Thank you Smitha. 😊
I’m glad he is there for her in her time of grief.
Thanks Lisa.
You’re welcome.
Not a happy poem but certainly beautifully penned.
Thanks arv.
Beautifully sad. ❤
I love your take on this prompt, Balroop.
Thank you Darlene.
*applause, applause applause!*
Much love,
David
Thanks David, I love the way you’ve encouraged me.